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She stared down the path as she had done for weeks. Where was Mama? Tears ran down her cheeks, as her Dad, staggering, led her back home. |
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She stared down the path as she had done for weeks. Where was Mama? Tears ran down her cheeks, as her Dad, staggering, led her back home. |
38 comments:
Very nice Sylvia, you and I were thinking along on the same wavelength. Hope you had a wonderful Weekend.
Oh, this is so sad. She is too young to understand. I hope she gets her mama back, but if that is not possible, I hope she gets a wonderful new mama. Excellent, Sylvia!
so emotive and powerful in such few words.... wow
So much sadness there in 140 characters, Sylvia. I'm always amazed how differently each of us sees the same picture.
-- K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
Oh, poor little girl. You amaze me with the way you captured the tragedy in just 140 characters. Great work!
These 137 characters hint at unspeakable brokenness. Beautifully done, my friend.
Ah, she does seem a bit dejected - now I know why... Poor thing.
This is a sad one-great job!
Was her mama the grown up Goldilocks? Maybe the 3 friendly bears will bring mama home soon.
That is so dark. Wonderful Microfiction.
A little sad.m0m is always important f0r the kids her effeciency is the best if she is away tr0uble always arise.
innocence,loneliness and hardwork
O so very sad! There is a feeling that something is severely wrong! The fact that dad "staggers" is quite dramatic! A powerful little micro!
Oh! So sad.....nicely done.
This was powerful. Excellently done.
Oh dear that's sad! Well written.
Oh my gracious! This is so sad... and I agree, very powerful!
Sad story, Sylvia. But it touched my soul because it could be real.
Oh, how sad!
Mine is on my BooksPlease blog today.
Extremely touching and very well depicted. Great, Sylvia, as always.
Excellent. Those few words speak volumes!
* Sob* didn't see that one coming!
Thanks-
beautifully done...a quiet dispair
So sad. Does daddy stagger from grief or alcohol? I wonder. Despite that, this little story tugs at my heart for somehow I relate to her tiny tears. Marvelous.
Oh, so poignant. Beautiful MM, Sylvia.
Aw such a sad MM this week Sylvia. I hope her Mummy comes back.
So incredibly sad. Hopefully her mother finds her way back.
O how dreadfully sad. Did her mom just return to the work force, or-or WORSE? will Kleenex be necessary? I'm going to go with the returning to work after being at home with her daughter, whose dad wants to be a stay-at-home, because "Tt's only fair. Where'd you put the remote and bon bons?." Man, that guy gets on my last nerve! Hm... Somewhere along the line, I let this story take a wrong turn, didn't I?
so sad...great MM :)
oh my and the music to go along with it..boo hoo
good one
This is poignant and lyrical. Looks like you succeeded in making us all reach for our tissues.
Have a great week, Sylvia. (The sun's actually shining in Portland this minute!)
You have expressed a lot of story in just a few words. But so sad.
A sad mystery as to what happened..... :O(
Awww Sylvia...
Oh, so sad. But sometimes stories and real lives are.
She does have that forlorn feel to her, huh?
Nicely done, as always! Have a great week...you always start mine off right.
Oh my. Too sad!
Wow, so very sad!
Oh--this was a sad one for the week, but very well done! I hope mama returns soon...
Cheers!
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